雅思写作一直是中国考生的软肋。相信烤鸭们看过无数的高分作文,甚至是满分作文。今天薛老师就带大家来分析一下剑 5 给的一篇 4 分作文,看看在这篇文章中是否能找到自己的影子。
WRITING TASK 2
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic。
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
下面是一个 4 点作文的例子。请耐心阅读。
According to universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Therefore, this essay will show some reasons of argument for and argument against.
Firstly, I will discuss about two reasons of argument for to begin with universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject because it will be balance of idea while studying。 In general, there usually are different ideas between man and woman。 These lead to, new ideas from different vision will happen。 Another reason is it display that have equal of society not eccept in each side。 In addition, nowadays, the most societies become to accept ability of both in any way。
Secondly, I will discuss about one reason of argument against that is some subjects not suitable for each other. For example, some subject of sports such as weigh putting. It is not suitable for female because there are different of body between male and female.
In conclusion, I agree with universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Moreover, it depend on what the subjects that the students want to study, they can choose by themselves because I believe that if the students like to study their subjects, they will do it well so that I strongly agree with this topic.
这个 “神的工作” 没有大的争论,一开始的介绍和全文观点陈述的作用完全没有。除了风格化的介绍,文章并没有讨论与主题相关的内容。此外,候选人的观点非常不一致。标题在没有移动的情况下被复制了三次,字数只有 181 字,所以字数也造成了积分的损失。
从考官的评语中,我们可以看出考官紧扣写作评分标准,从 Task response( 任务中做出回应)
Coherence and cohesion( 一致和连接) Lexical resource( 词汇资源) Grammatical range and accuracy ( 语法范围和正确性) 分四个方面。
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